I am extremely happy to be able to accept this award. I’d also like to nominate Seabell for next edition.
“Abandonment” was said.
I picked words from you as ripe
And bursting as cherries and
I also watched the beside-the-table
Where you used to take your seat and
Made a small cut in time
So the past could sap your
Presence. Meantime is where we
Dwelt. Moon-time is the air
We inhaled, that a balcony has formidably
Protected.
A mutilated siren of your weeping
Precedes me to the hospital of loss.
This is where nurses have soothing names
And talk of gentle blood, giggling.
I sit, my far flung gaze like a limping dachshund
Confining its world to saccadic barking,
…I, Here, Now, I, Here, Now, Now, Now…!
The solipsism of intellect
Deprived of green trees, white brooks and yellow thunders,
Doorknobs, letters and steering wheels.
So I sat, “there” was the only signification
That world had not disappeared.
All because there was someone
And then there was no-one anymore.
May 18, 2011 at 4:43 pm
LOVE your line breaks. this is a powerful and poignant piece, reminiscent of Wilco.
beautiful.
May 18, 2011 at 5:51 pm
Very powerful. I’ve read it three times and keep catching something new. Thank you for sharing!
May 18, 2011 at 6:56 pm
oh this is good. I really like it.
May 18, 2011 at 7:28 pm
Very well versed 🙂 Thanks for sharing!
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May 18, 2011 at 7:54 pm
This is hauntingly beautiful.
May 18, 2011 at 10:38 pm
Beautiful, the line breaks are intriguing, great flow
May 19, 2011 at 5:42 am
some words of wisdom,
and true facts too….
amazing writing, have fun today.
😉
May 19, 2011 at 6:14 pm
Excellent write, I like how you tell this.
May 19, 2011 at 7:50 pm
You described it perfectly! And the words saying it better are the naked ones: “All because there was someone/And then there was no-one anymore.”
May 19, 2011 at 8:23 pm
Fantastic – evocative and eleganty crafted. A definite in my favourites for this week’s rally.
I love your structure and the poignance it creates for your imagery, particularly that which explores nature -the cherry bursting and the weeping sap are so alive!
‘The solipsism of intellect
Deprived of green trees’
Fabulous! Thanks for sharing 🙂
May 20, 2011 at 2:07 pm
This is thought provoking indeed! (And that’s a true challenge for me) I’m definitely going to have to read this again, just to see what I missed the first time..
Off to read poem #10 for the poets rally agreement!
May 20, 2011 at 3:14 pm
awesome.
May 20, 2011 at 4:06 pm
Beautiful, powerful piece =) Love it
May 21, 2011 at 7:17 am
A really well written piece, wonderully descriptive, drawing me in to a very specific feeling and moment in time. Thanks for sharing that!
May 21, 2011 at 1:23 pm
simply loved the way the lines are broken, the pauses well meant and others cryptic, flow with such meaning.. amazing one
May 22, 2011 at 10:24 pm
The breaks were meant for breathing, right?
Very nicely done, nice flow and full of feeling. Thanks for sharing.
May 23, 2011 at 1:20 am
the past lingers…interesting read 🙂
enjoy the rally!
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May 24, 2011 at 5:22 pm
Wonderful use of line breaks 🙂
May 24, 2011 at 7:36 pm
I am not sure what to do with this award besides thanking you. In reality I am quite comfortable being an imperfect poet. 🙂 It makes me feel like keep trying… Still, I’ll try not to disappoint you. Thanks!
May 24, 2011 at 9:33 pm
Thanks for the nomination.
have fun…
😉
May 25, 2011 at 1:03 pm
Beautiful poem.
Congratulations on the award!
May 26, 2011 at 4:47 am
This leaves me really, really sad. It’s an amazing write. Extremely penetrating for me.
May 28, 2011 at 10:56 pm
powerful words, sad but well done.
May 28, 2011 at 10:57 pm
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